Jieshika

😭 the pacing & tension were perfect in this chapter! My heart was actually racing during the chase scene, even on the 2nd read through!

Yes! I remember really enjoying your action scenes! The descriptions are vivid enough to paint a picture and there's just enough internal thoughts to clue us into the reasons for his actions. I'm also liking that Lucian isn't invincible so

I don't remember enough detail from before the revisions but I can confirm that the narrative is smooth and the explanations are inserted very naturally. No jarring info dumps. Lucian's confusion came across well, too! I like how you're emp

Thanks for pointing out that you updated this chapter again! The added info & expanded scenes really improved the flow and I was much more immersed this time. I hope we get some back story for the origins of Ha-jin's roleplay character. The

Interesting premise for this dungeon! I'm a little disappointed that Ha-jin's already so OP but I guess that expedites the story telling. Quick continuity note: Hwa Yeon Ran was described as having black hair in the last chapter and silver

Ok wow huuuge storyline change with the revision! And in typical Ha-jin fashion, bulldozing ahead regardless of the risk 🫣 I feel like this is going to move fast!

Ha-jin is such a bulldozer when it comes to his fighting style 😂 his mana usage is basically "pour it into whatever I'm thinking about and see what happens". It'll be fun to see how his style develops as he navigates the different worlds

It's so interesting that I remember thinking "ahhh, Yoo-bin you're still so young" when I first read this. Had exactly the same reaction just now. And Ha-jin's cool-guy aesthetic works well with his nonchalance. So much bravado at 18 years